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You're my rain in a bottle ottle. Oh, oh, oh Keep me company, thats what you should do. I'll catch you falling from the sky, little droplets in my bottle. ...

Alright guys, first of all, I do know how to use correct grammar and spelling. I typed this on the spot without going back to edit. So chill. I don't ...

"In the dark, winds part Twilight soul" yep. i capitalized I because 'In the dark, winds part' is one thought. and the second is 'Twilight soul and hawaiian heart'. i ...

Tell me you didnt feel my feet touching yours in the hot summery air by the pool, and in our room Or my hands feeling your butt, and trying to ...

Hey aloha! So Sonny is...Sage, right? Might be a good idea to choose one or the other, otherwise it's a bit confusing; I thought we had three main characters at ...

"What I thought went up were the clouds" I like the idea of thoughts going upward. I think it's really nice sounding. Did you mean "where", though? Were = "They ...

surf, sun, hawaii steel drums and ska beats sing of Marley ever sweet sublime cali or blazing maui hippy culture soaked within thee ripped jeans and bonfires sexy bodies in ...

it was interesting. i liked it to tell you the truth. "Only Ghouls and Ghost came out to play." do you mean ghouls and ghosts? and why are they capitalized? ...

"Love is the worry of loosing a soul mate." Losing just has one o. "Love is the worry of learning to hate." i didnt like that line. it does not ...

I’m in love, I’m in love, I’m in love I really think that the repetition is unnecessary. You can make that just one "I'm in love" and then add an ...

hmm. what influenced you to write this? if you have no experiences or nothing has influenced you to write this, that would be the weirdest case. this writing seems like ...

that image is striking. "Her woes whisper as silent as the wind, but howl loudly as old memories are awakened." that was beautiful. and so was this, "The heart is ...

In the streets of New York, Luke Amistad walks to work from his favorite Dunkin Donuts. He works within Capitol Records for artists and repertoire (A&R). Luke is from Canada. ...

the beginning was nicely written. it reminded me of the beginning in New Moon "She screwed her face into an awkward smile, and me, unsure how to reply" me should ...

i honestly didn't like it. the first two lines were good, leading to a promising song. but the whole song seemed flat "But I’m too blame for this crime" Too ...