aloe

All right this is real short so my critique will be too. the main problem with this is that there is no reason to keep reading, whats the hook? where ...

right, im aloe and ill be critiquing this today, sorry if my critiques are harsh, but its how you learn. okay lessee, Ice-crystals shimmer and shine in the dying light ...

Only guy you'll find critiquing the romantic fiction forum. :oops: anyway... The front door slammed shut as I walked to the kitchen. "Livy?" My mom called. "Yea." I said. "Oh, ...

right, here i am to do my copy editor act. kay since i haven't really read much (any) of the other chapters im gonna focus on flow and grammar rather ...

I can't decently critique this cause there's nothing here to critique! right anyway, on to something less mean. Whatever else happened, I was thoroughly sick of "being" drop thoroughly, adverbs ...

I don't know if i'm allowed to reply to my own topic, but i just wanted to thank everyone for the help. my special thanks goes to buscador for playing ...

well you reviewed my piece so i figured I'd return the favor, (sorry if I'm a little harsh) hokay, lesee here, She loved how the cool October wind beat against ...

all righty then, this looked all lonely with no replies so i figured i save you the anticipation and shred it. so here goes my picky copy editor act. As ...

okay i'm not a huge poem fan really, but anyway this didn't make an ounce of sense to me. Where the heck does D-Day fit into this. im a huge ...

okay here's my copy editor act to save... the writing. I heaved the yellow bag up up what? tell us more about his bag. is it heavy? does it have ...

lol, love bubble wrap. themen in the white coats give me a lot of it. 9/10 :P

Here I am to do my copeyeditor act. okay lessee here... Anna, her mother, and her two friends, Alyson and Hannah, sat silent as they drove to Anna's grandfather's house. ...

okay its all cool and all that you've decided to believe in god and what not (heck, i used to be a Lutheran so i know the feeling) but i ...

kay first off.. like the idea real cool. but... alright i'm not going to go into specifics because there are just too many little issues here. first off, there are ...

eh not incredibly grabbing 6/10