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This was a really good piece of writing. I could really feel the pain of the character. You choice of words was also really good it enhanced the story very ...

Good job. I really liked it. I thought you found a good way to work the mirrior into your story and that you mentioned being connfused at how it got ...

I think this story has potential and it seems exciting but I don't that jumping right into action was a good choice for a begining. I was so confused that ...

This was a really good story and I can't wait for more. I'm not the best at spelling and grammer but there was some words in there that did not ...

Chapter One “Sam catch!”, I yelled as I grabbed a piece of bread from a near by stall and threw it across the market. My best friend, Sam, who was ...

I'm not the best with poetry but even I could tell that it was a good poem. The whole time I was reading it I was always wondering what was ...

I thought it was good even though it needed more discription. I mostly think that you should describe your characters more. Tell us more about them like what they look ...

Really good job. At first I didn't understad it but then when I saw the ending things made sence so I went back to the top and read it again. ...

I think you did a good job on this short story. There was a few spelling and grammer mistakes that were sometimes very noticible. I also think that you should ...

Chapter One “Sam catch!”, I yelled as I grabbed a piece of bread from a near by stall and threw it across the market. My best friend, Sam, who was ...

I really liked this chapter but I thought that the transition from the first chapter to this chapter was a bit connfusing. I also found some mistakes, not just grammer ...

I think your story is really good. The characters seemed really real. Also after that one chapter I could tell where this story was headed and that's what kept me ...

I think it's pretty good so far, but I didn't really capture my attention. I also think that you should describe stuff more like the cavern, I don't really have ...

It was great. I love the characters and I thought it was really well writen! Good job

Amazing. You were very descriptive and I really like that. The ending was also very nice.