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Hello Lydia, Welcome to YWS! I really like where your story is going, but it needs some work. It's a little confusing in the beginning since we are thrown right ...

Hello Dalvor! Great start, you used a lot of imagery which really helped me understand the image you were trying to portray. I suppose everyone has pointed out the few ...

Hello kilroyCHIC89! Overall, I think you're a good writer, but this story need some work. I loved the theme(I'm a sucker for a good teen drama story!) and the way ...

Ha, wow sounds just like my high school :D Anyways, great story! I'd love if you added more detail so we get a better idea to who the characters really ...

They were on there knees It should be their instead if there As power full as she acted As powerful as she acted... There were some grammar, typos, tense changes, ...