adi

This is an edit. I added a bit, subtracted a bit, all thanks to your suggestions :]. I want to make it clear that the fantasy/sci-fi aspect will become clear ...

Splendidly written, adi :D I feel kind of bad that I still don't get what the " s t i l l " and " f o r w a ...

Splendidly written, adi :D I feel kind of bad that I still don't get what the " s t i l l " and " f o r w a ...

LONELILY Not a word. 'Lonely' or 'Lonesomely' will do. i know it's not. the mistake was purposeful. it comes from a song by damien rice of the same name.

SAYING ANYTHING b a c k w a r d “I don’t know what to do with the kid no more,” Daddy slurs. I stand behind the door, tears pouring ...

thanks you guys! a lot :)

WALKING AND TALKING b a c k w a r d Daddy tosses things over the table, his face angry. Papers flutter to the floor, so peaceful compared to his ...

I know truly deep, that I love you to death. And you love me back, so much, I don't even know how much myself. i didn't like this stanza. the ...

i think this is lovely. it seems like one of those quick thought poems, just splurges of inspiration. so there's not much to critique. it makes me sad, but i ...

carey carey I’ve know you forever I’ve known you forever and a year and I think, I think I think that maybe…. I’m falling in love with you you’re the ...

this was really super amazing. like really. the writing was spectacular. haha. i'm a little bit blown away. i only found one thing that bothered me: Those days where he ...

yeah emma, this is my work. thank you very much. i spend a lot of time studying proportions and stuff like that.

It's a bit confusing having a huge block of dialouge between two people. The general rule is that you have a new line for each character that speaks. Like: “Do ...

"awesome". it's okay if your character says, "That's awesome!" but i absolutley hate it when this happens, "The monster rose with awesome power." It sounds STUPID. i physically cringe every ...

Topic of first story/novel I don't remember my first story cleary. I can assure you that I wrote hundrens of "books" about cats. Dear lord. The cats. Anyway. My first ...