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Is this kinda based off the Drizzt series? Because I recognized "the Underdark". :D Anyway, I'm not the best at giving crits, but I shall point out the ones which ...

I agree with the comments about the whole rushed thing. I honestly think her reaction to everything isn't believable at all. Getting transformed suddenly in a single day is going ...

What Jay said. It was simple, straightforward, and somehow made me hooked till the end. I'm fine with the name Clover, it sounds pretty cute. Grammar and vocabulary is more ...

Lol, it was good. I was hooked, and the writing was fantastic, save a couple of typos. The only thing would be the later parts... It sounded -pardon me- a ...

Quite humourous, but then it's still far too short!! x_x Nothing much has happened here... In fact, you can combine Ch 2 and Ch1 together and still call it half ...

Aww, man, cliffhanger... And I liked the way you made it seem so sudden and somewhat abstract, it leaves us skeptical to whether the man killed Amanda or not (I ...