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I have a lot of criticism for the haiku . The thing that bothered me the most was the third haiku, seeing as I could make nothing out of it: ...

That was accidental, thank you for pointing it out though.

The twilight comes now The sun's bathed in golden drops Until night takes them The hiding sunset The air between day and night Beyond the oak tree The night sky ...

Hi, I would like to make one particular point clear: haiku in general don't have title . Now, on to the haiku: I rather like it, although, in my opinion ...

This poem is the best poem I have ever read. It is very in its build, as well as in its descriptions. This poem is not something that can improve ...

It's a very interesting poem, and its well written, the only problem I have with this poem is this: But such is the life of a dish washing girl, A ...

Hi, your poem is very nice, but there were a couple of things that bothered me: 1) It was my choice to walk away, I knew what kind of consequences ...

Hi, this poem is rather interesting, touching, and it displays the emotions very nicely. There were a few problems, however: 1) and silently pray to God I have a problem ...

Hello, I liked the poem, grim as it was, it started organized and gradually the thoughts simply scattered, which in my opinion, gave the ending a feel of despair. Now ...

Hello, I don't have any real criticism, its simply too good to have any basic flaws I can see, but regarding what I have seen: 1).....Sorry, but there really is ...

Hi, your poem is very nice, describing life as a game of tag, who would have thought of that? Well, anyways, I had a few problems with it: 1) The ...

Hi, quite frankly, I don't know what to make of this. It is very nice and yet feels lacking. Its a bit too straight forward, at least for me, and ...

Your poem is very nice in concept, and it is nice overall, but there are points in which you are too straight forward, such as: Today was a fairytale Every ...

Hello Rose, That was a very nice piece, and I can relate to it, at least to some extent. Now,criticism: 1) Try not to disturb the pictures and feelings you ...

Hey man, this poem is one of the funniest things I've read in a long time. Now for tips: 1) You've rushed into the poem, you should take your time ...