Zorakero

I do appreciate the criticism. I have very few minutes to work on my stories so I usually miss the obvious, since I'm trying to write down ideas before I ...

I like the last few words. It's a nice scene ending :D The idea is definately cool and you should continue on with it.

Thanks for the replies :) I'm not really into peoms this was a more of a practice run since I'm new to the site... I wrote this in sixth grade...which ...