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Thank you for your thoughts and suggestions.

I am mostly agreeing with you, and looking over my work to see what I can improve, but as far as number 4. While not fair, or practical to make ...

This originally was a prologue, but it grew into a chapter, so lots of prologue based things, such as withholding names has been kept. As i have later plans for ...

Thank you for the grammar and thematic error point outs. No matter how much you edit something, there will always be some mistakes left over. Side effect of knowing what ...

science obsolete*

@Sacredlege The harshest thing you said was: "and I'll admit that I am. Just a little bit interested, that is." Which was fair enough, no matter what I write, everyone ...

p.s.s If you dislike milky quartz, and I rather keep the economy based on gems, which most common gem do you think would work better?

P.s I try to imply his powers by how he looks, a human shaped piece of black ash, and his name a consequence of the timing of his depressed laugh.

The titles are listed on a bounty, names thought up by the countries that sent out the bounties. In order to make the targets more memorable, many of the bounties ...

Thank you for your thoughts, and for pointing out grammar errors for me. This will be helpful when I revise the chapter. Have a nice day as well!

P.S If you read the beginning, you in theory should have a very clear idea about where his name comes from. It has nothing to do with his powers. The ...

"Marie is 14-years old? And she's working for her grandpa? And she's supposed to be attracting customers?...Why do I have an icky feeling right now?" In small towns, kids working ...

sleep well

I shall wait for 3 reviews, since I want to have a good idea how people are taking this idea before I start pumping out chapters. So if you like ...

Thank you, your thoughts will help me with later chapters, and possible revisions for this. by is the whole " I can squeal heroically" part Yes I was trying to ...