Zetsubougakusei

Thank you so much for your constructive criticism. I'll work on fixing those things and making sure to point out who I'm talking about. :D

Chapter 3 Caravan to Mao Part 1 Clack, clack clack! Vaughn was huddled over a small tepee of wood. He was smashing a rock and a fire stone together, making ...

This is really nice! Bit in my opinion, you could combine some verses together and it would make it an easier read. But poetry is whatever the reader wants it ...

Its interesting, but how you used so many commas sort of annoyed me. Try to use conjunction words a little more and sometimes even when you do use them, you ...

Chapter 2 Princess Laurel "Vaughn, wake up already!" Mayuko shouted at Vaughn. It was another bright and sunny morning and Vaughn was still in bed, sleeping. The young soldier pulled ...

To Kamorama, The little bit about Vaughn being girly, it was supposed to be a funny little thing. But I guess it didn't go over well. I'll change that part, ...

Maybe you can add a few more lines about your nervousness? You know, to describe it a little more. Other than that its really good!

What kind of aliens are they? XD What do you think they look like? (I loved the Haikuu~!)

Anyone want to say anything? I would really like some constructive criticism...

It reminds me of the song "Fly me to the Moon" The one Frank Sinatra sings. So far what you have is really good! I also wonder how its supposed ...

I really like this. What sort of genre were you thinking to play this song? Do you have what it sounds like in your head?

(( This is an old poem of mine that I found. It's a religious one, so please, if you do not like religious works, do not criticize. )) I thought ...

Hello there! I'm new here too. I just posted up my first chapter of my novel not too long ago. I'm worry about it though..I'm like.."What if people don't like ...

(( This is the first installment of my story that I'm writing. This may be a little boring...sorry! D; )) Chapter 1 The Soldier It was a wonderfully bright day ...

Hello there everyone! I'm Zetsubougakusei! (Student of Despair) But you may call me Zetsu. I'm an eighteen year old female who is looking to write a novel. I have plenty ...