Zarhail

@megsug do you think you could have a look at my fist chapter? All of the other at least in some form written parts are linked should you need them.

@dukeofwonderland Oh sod off, what did I do to you? also hello people I am violating this thread and have no pictures. I wasn't even aware this thing existed but ...

I'm looking for someone to review my Intro , I haven't written in a while and I think I could use some constructive criticism as well as feedback as to ...

I'd like somebody to critique my Intro , I'd love to hear something constructive or at least an opinion on the voice/tone/pacing/choice of words and maybe even plot so far.