ZanyPlebeian

Pretty piece. I think it was a bit obvious...anytime wilted roses enter poetry, you're treading on old ground and it's hard to make it seem fresh and new. But still ...

This was intriguing...I didn't like the first stanza very much at all, but you convinced me in the second and third ones. Oh, one thing though...I hate the use of ...

This was too typical I felt. There was nothing glaringly cliche, but the whole piece moved together in such a way that I feel I could have read this in ...

Run to the pound, boy, run It's there you'll be when you've found it. I'm not clove-hooved It's okay to get close to me--you say Siete Vulcano I say no, ...

I wrote it when I was high....

[untitled] An Experimental Piece “Begin your poem with a quote—it increases the impact and provides excellent voice.” Love is like Macbeth weeping over feminine beards. “Who is your audience?

Very nice read. I don't have any specific problems with it, but I would like to commend you on how you pulled off the rhyme. It felt natural. That is ...

Psy--when you put your poetry up for critique, and someone critiques it, it is not the time to become defensive and try to explain yourself; rather, it's time to either ...

Psy, You overlooked the plentiful (and quite rare) praise I dropped on you. I didn't think this was weird at all--rather, I thought it was very beautiful. There was just ...

Only a Lost Child "To betray is to love without choosing," you said as we stood alone at twilight. I only bit the inside of my lip and looked at ...

This was written technically well, but not terribly originally. I did see a fine number of cliches in it, though they didn't make me hate the poem. I would have ...

I wasn't going to do a full critique, but... [comments], {remove}, (add) freedom 3-23-06 Freedom [a very hard topic to write about, because it's been done so many times before. ...

Fourth stanza, I could swear you ripped that off from Dylan. You did, didn't you? If you didn't, you ripped it off from someone. I'm on to you. It fits, ...

I understood the message on a second reading. I like the theme of this piece, but to me it appears to be making too much of an attempt at a ...

This one didn't emotionally connect to me as well as some of your pervious work. Technically, it's very well-done, but there's something missing just below the surface. I know that's ...