ZanyPlebeian

Wow! this was really refreshing to me. You took a great idea and expanded it with excellent words. Great job.

"A goodnight for you epic lies" I think this should either be "your epic lies" or "you, epic lies"

Beyond excellent. There are no substantial crits I can give, but I found something small: "Your lashes brush aside you demons," Should this perhaps be "your" demons? Otherwise, absolutely perfect.

I don't mean this as malicious, but I found the poem to be very cliche and trite. First of all, the concept of a "trapped mind" is not a new ...

This was enjoyable for me. I found the metaphor of "the beast" cliche, and would try to change that.

He Walked Among the Unspoiled Rushes He walked among the unspoiled rushes Which lined the shores of sparkling ponds, A free soul, untouched by dirt-covered hands And seen by few ...

" ed intendo farlo " means something to the effect of "and I intend to!" I really wrote this as a random interlude to any seriousness after being annoyed by ...

I really enjoyed this piece. I don't know if you've heard the song "Woman is the Nigger of the World," but I saw the connection clearly in the first stanza...overall, ...

This was gorgeous. Everything about it was enjoyable...if I could change anything, though, I would change the last line. Because, when you are 24, you could still feel the same ...

I really liked the feel of this piece. Being a fan of German myself, I liked how you integrated the language. I also dig the long, flourid lines...they really fit. ...

Very good. However, I think you could have found something more interesting to say on the final line. Brian

Excellent. I really enjoyed this read; don't have anything to add at this point. Brian

Mrs. Dalloway by Virginia Woolf

Allen Ginsberg, William Carlos Williams, William Shakespeare, Charles Bukowski, Walt Whitman, Dylan Thomas, Bob Dylan (yes he IS a poet). That's all I can think of right now.

Flowers on Grave for Father I walked through steaming graveyards, my hands feeling the black flowers as I passed by--there was no sanctuary between me and the spreading fog. There ...