ZanyPlebeian

Here, I've put my suggestions in bold and my [ comments ] in brackets: ~*~ Barbie Girl ~*~ Maybelline babies scream while mommy sings don't you wanna be pretty? Hold ...

I have some divided feelings over this poem. I like it; I'll say that much. You used some creative language and showed me something orginal while at the same time ...

I've read versions of this poem a thousand times. "I'm different, why can't you just accept me for who I am." I'm not saying it shouldn't be said; it should ...

Yeah, I felt this one attempted to have a rhythm but sort of stumbled over it at times. There were a few good word choices, such as "Painfull is to ...

I love how open you are to suggestions...

I enjoyed it. I have no significant contributions to make, but agree with Xanthan Gum. 8)

A simple poem, but nice. I liked the way you wrote it, the voice was perfect. i don't know what the above posters mean by "poetic language" but I don't ...

1. Catcher in the Rye - J.D. Salinger 2. The Sun Also Rises - Ernest Hemingway 3. Lord of the Rings - J.R.R. Tolkien 4. The Great Gatsby - F. ...

Song of Chief After seeing One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest Laughter is written on the windows—insanity drunk and swinging at night—ornaments on a sad tree—liquor in the hearts of ...

Very nice! I think the best part of this poem is the voice in it; I can tell you feel what you're saying. The only thing I would change are ...

Portrait of a Red-haired Woman Form based on "Portrait of a Lady" by William Carlos Williams Your hair is the spreading of Autumn whose crimson, crooked hand reaches through woods ...

Ridicule “That’s ridiculous,” she said, and I am wont to agree. Ridicule of the peasant mother, hands grasping the doorframe, sheepishly peering out of her door at her husband and ...

Hmmm...I feel like I should comment on this since I somehow ended up in it... it's HIGHLY aggressive and comes off as overbearing at times. As sorry as I am, ...

it's an interesting poem... "yet others sparkle, ‘n’ only one in a thousand, once a lifetime, shimmer. " That piece I found refreshing. "because I see an entire humanity enraptured ...

Bravo! Easily the best poem of yours I've read. I think it started off a bit shaky; I was sort of annoyed by the repetition of "six billion." After the ...