ZanyPlebeian

Correction: I am now at 8366! I've actually ended up with three new viewpoint characters. And it ended perfectly, with them all going to sleep. Dern amazin'. And I'm ahead ...

I'm at 6052 and about to begin my first session of the day. A new character has appeared in my mind...

Miasma I think: this mire is only made for one— for me, for blood that pulses through my limbs. I watch the fog that leaves all hope undone, and cry, ...

The Death of a Dog Watching a puppy grow into a dog is a most rewarding experience. Days fly by; days of catch in the park; days of long autumn ...

I liked this piece. I definitely felt for its message, and I think it was concise and clearly stated. Sometimes it was too obviously stated, such as in the lines: ...

This was a vanity piece. Do we really need another poem about how hard it is to be a writer? We are all in the same situation.

This wasn't too terribly remarkable to me. It seemed too typical, too "I'm a teenager in high school"-feeling to me. "I pick up that orange ball in my hands" "That" ...

I enjoyed this piece. The tone of it is very "poetic" to me, and yet it seems fresh and new. Good job.

“the other one” A work in progress She was the ghost of stimulation when I first saw her pass my way; a premonition, thrown here by some divine command. Her ...

No, it's in the "Narrative Poetry" forum.

August Rain She stood alone, silent in the ruins of her own surrender; she breathed plumes of steam in the bitter Monday daybreak; her body radiated to all around. All ...

Hell is a Place Hell is an over-and-under place; it is fueled with the souls of pilgrims and the tongues of shepherds. The raven crows at twilight for broken water, ...

An interesting take on a love/sex poem. I like it. I'm not sure why it's all in italics, though. The final stanza is brilliant.

This is a very complex poem, but I really liked it. The only thing that could really be changed would be that complexity; some of the thoughts/ideas extend on line ...

(Sorry, double-post. :oops: )