ZaddieCaso

wow. I just read all 15 chapters of this at once! I didn't even review, I didn't even analyze the text. Your story just sucked me in, it was like ...

This was always gonna be a multi-chapter story, it's why the reflection is so necessary. Thanks to all who have reviewed, I will be making all the edits now :)

Oh, thanks. There's the first 10 chapters of Racing Wind in advanced critiques if you want to take a look but that is the non edited version so be warned ...

wow, super neopets, doesn't get much cooler than that :)

Ah sorry Ella, the italics didn't come up on the thoughts but never mind.

Thanks! Just out of curiosity, where is Gehemenal?

I have to ask if this is true, only because in the piece the main character is pecieved as male. Sorry If I'm mistaken but it should be in fiction ...

sorry, just the first thing I noticed. You wrote the title as "the comming of the clouds", surely it should be "the coming of the clouds"

Whats wrong with the semi-colons! And it's Mrs Bevan. Stop stalking my work ella, I will give you the second book when it's edited :P See ya after the holls, ...

You got it, completely. So glad that someone could understand, I thought I'd made it too confusing.

Hi, just a quick reminder. YWS has a kind of unofficial ratio of 2 reviews: 1 piece of literature, kind of like common curtersy. Just reminding you as you have ...

Well what can I say, thanks!

thats one loong poem

Thanks for the comments Miriam but is there anything you think i should change? I'm not to sure about the beginning, it seems a little vague and i'm not sure ...

yes! been waiting for this chapter for ages, will give you a review soon