YoungWalter

Being honest I am not fond of "The Thief", i think the word 'irises' does not work and the ending is weak. However, that out of the way, I really ...

Silent Hero Buckled legs, laboured breath, She fights to stand so tall. Her journey in life has neared its end But strong of pride she held. In her youth her ...

hi Mars, thanks for the suggestions, I dont ignore any advice anyone gives me, I just dont always update the poems on here :) but all the suggestions get worked ...

that is flipping brilliant

the idea of the little boy is interesting and i liked it, but not 100% original, little varitation of the little girl or boy of horror or the black dog ...

Seasons of the Heart Do you remember the fields in Summer? The way we fell between the rows and touched. That was the day I became a lover, Naked in ...

Requiem to a Gambler The gambler stalks the same old streets, His pockets cold and bare. He walks and walks to not go home, Although he knows not where. He ...

p.s I like the end lines rhyming third line with the sixth etc it ties in very well indeed

i think its beautiful. i dont say that much perhaps because I can be harsh, but I simply wish that i written it myself. I felt both their pains without ...

I really like this as a well structured piece of poetry, the rhyme scheme (A,B,C,B) isnt too plain but retains a nice rhythmic simplicity, and the syllable sceme isnt too ...

Hi there, Although I admire the obvious passion behind your content, i find fault in the loose rhythm. I feel you could combat this by correlating your syllables, for example ...