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It was brilliant, I loved it! But some critique. The last stanza is a bit...ahh overwhelming, for a better word for it. Try smoothing it out a bit and making ...

On a mean note: Take out "Newsflash" It's overwhelmingly childish and it makes you seem like a spoiled brat on a Disney movie. If you want to be taken seriously, ...

I liked it. It seemed like parts of this poem weren't unified. I didn't grasp the entire concept of the poem, I did get each little segment, but, to me,together ...

Uh, that's one hell of a dream you got there. Sorry, I think it a bit surreal that Jesus would have a gun and blast your mirror to pieces for ...

Are all evils inherent, as something waiting innate? Or be wickedness a skill, As something learnt by free will? Comment: Yeah, I like this start off. Very nice. Personally, the ...

Oh, and the comma at "I want, what I want" Yeah, that comma between "want" and "what" isn't needed either.

Put a period in there. You seemed to just be rambling on with commas like that little kid on the Incredibles that's like "and then...and then...and then..." Otherwise, I do ...

I think it's very important for your audience to understand a poem. If this poem is just for yourself, it's fabulous. I wouldn't change a thing. I actually like the ...

Haha, so you understand my obsession with rhythm, but no, I'm no rapper. This is spoken word.

Don't forget, "This shit ain't serious" is actually my last line of the poem. Personally, I don't talk like that.

No: Is this story supposed to carry similarities to Underworld? Nevertheless, there were a lot of grammatical errors and a lot of places where it was hard to understand what ...

Meshugenah...brilliant. I want your name. Thanks for all the welcome love guys.

Welcome. I hope you enjoy this site. I'll be looking for something excellent to review soon, so don't keep me waiting. Well...I hope you are able to right though...I've got ...

Cool, I'm from the south as well, except in a place with the "th" sometimes gets replaced with an "f". So, it's good to see a mouf from the souf ...

It may be acute torticollis...which is like a charlie horse in your neck? Try using a heating back on your neck or some Icy Hot. If it gets to bad ...