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  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Nightsong

    "She WAS a poison to the world, poison…" Change that, need the "was" there. "her nails breaking its skin as she broke once again into a run." She broke the ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Nevermore

    Actually it's more than 50 percent of their DNA. I'm a biology nut, you see, in fact identical twins share about...99.9 percent of their DNA. The similarities are extravagantly close. ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Remember, wax melts

    delicate wings as fragile as the bones in a newborn's foot. Ewwww...why are you breaking new born babies' foots? Haha, I kid. I really do. A poem based off the ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: She Saw It

    DID YOU SEE THE HAND IN THAT EYE? WICKED!!!!!!!! But to the story "jiggled and jaggled" lol how trite. Don't use passé phrases like this anymore if you want to ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Romantic Novels Re: I'll Sing You a Song Tonight (Chapter 1--Sing for Me)

    "Seth shook his bandmate, finally deciding to just slap him a couple times with the pillow, safely tucked in a green and black plaid pillowcase." How about: "Seth shook is ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Jesse

    That's too cute.

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: An Ode to Evolution

    Uh, I thought Alexandrian poems had 12 syllables....but, if you say so. The beats are a bit off. Trust me, I counted. If evolution be false - (7) a malice ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Kayla--Love

    Yeah...well..that's lovely. I got the message across and carried out the purpose. It really didn't have a form or anything, so I guess I can't really critique it. It seemed ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: harry potter

    HAHAHA! You wrote that in like 5 seconds didn't you? Please don't post something like that again, I mean, not unless it's with some more poems, I feel bad that ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Other Poetry Re: Suicide

    Haha.....bookmarker LMAO! Uh, yeah. I liked the imagery, but sadly Qultur is right. There's no purpose and no meaning to it, so yes it was imaginative and interesting to read ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Stuck

    Hello. Yeah, so I'm a stickler for rhythm and rhyme and I am really glad I chose your poem today to revise. HA HA, bringing back old memories is a ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Thought & Feeling

    I don't need to do grammar, because Sadie is a real stickler for grammar and I trust she's got everything squared, but I will actually take a look at the ...

    Jul 25, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Sky Dance

    My friend, that WAS poetry because if that was a story, I'd be critiquing you like there were no tomorrow. It was lovely. So lovely. I liked it a lot. ...

    Jul 24, 2008
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Reminiscing of You

    It's good. I can't say I liked it, it's not personally my cup of tea, but I won't knock the fact that its a promising good work of poetry. Now ...

    Jul 24, 2008
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Passion Times Ten

    Honestly, I don't know why I read this poem. I guess it was out of curiousity, ha ha. But, hey, no worries, don't regret posting it, I was laughing my ...

    Jul 24, 2008


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