Yatta!

Eh, don't mix characters up. Names and personalities. Sometimes characters blur into each other and its a pain for the reader, so its best if you keep 'em straight. Have ...

I like that on your wall you state "Five points is taken from you face, Snape." You reek of class (high class).

Hide and Seek You left at 10 in momma’s black-heeled boots That clicked on asphalt like Beaded jump ropes. And in pink sparkling denim, I skipped along Like hopscotch. 1, ...

Yo, Your writing style is really good. It flows. Grammar is pretty good. The characters seem pretty well defined. I don't know what this story is about, but, as just ...

First of all, use punctuation. Really, this is ridiculously hard to read. I can't hold my breath that long and you don't convey yourself clearly without it. If you have ...

"who loved him, they're better off than he is and they're better off than I am - for I have been imprisoned by the public and " I caught a ...

I like it. It's short and sweet and packs a punch. The possessiveness of the speaker over his/her darling is tangible, and it paints a clear distinct image of someone ...

Ah, I'm working on a grocery list. Tomatoes Yogurt Dishwashing Detergent Ketchup Peanut Butter Flip-flops Bug repellent Alcohol swabs Bruces Baked beans Chocolate chips Cage Mouse trap .......this doe

Too choppy.

Transient and unformed I'm not a poet, a writer, a story-teller, a falsifier, a leader, a follower, a friend, an enemy, a fighter, a lover--no, definitely, not a lover. I've ...

I think you were on an alliteration high and it's all groovy baby. Yatta!

This isn't a real critique. I'm just going to tell you how I "feel" about this poem. I don't think this poem is true to you. I don't feel any ...

lol are you serious? Honest initial impression (HII): I laughed and thought it was a joke. I read it twice and my HII still stands. It's a clever rhyme you ...

I was scrolling through the "new" dramatic poems and I noticed yours because no one had written you a reply but now I understand why. When you stumble upon a ...

Yeah, i agree. this poem is definitely "inadequate" (coincidentally so, too!). I don't remember posting it it obviouosly isn't one that leaves an impression. Thank you all for the reviews, ...