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...Both my characters are dead... and this storybook has been over for a while so i doubt anyone will read this so unless someone speaks now... I AM THE WINNER ...

Thank you for the review, but I already knew that it is lacking many things. Any suggestions to make it even remotely presentable?

This was a good piece your first paragraphs were well written and easy to follow. However towards the middle your paragraphs became a little confusing. I don't know of anything ...

Swords clashed in the distance... I charged forward towards a knight who cut down three of my allies. I raised my blade to cut him down when another sword caught ...

In my Language Arts class I was given the assignment to write a historical piece about the 1930's boxcar kids. I am supposed to write a made up story told ...

I awake the next morning to the sound of chickadees chirping. Strange, I think. How there is something so peaceful in this peace less hell. I can see the bird ...

WOW two people drop out in one day, and it would appear that I am the person who knows... :? I could be selfish like posum and take both kills, ...

My eyes shoot open, someone is walking towards the building I'm in. A twig snaps, they are getting closer. I can hear their footsteps they are now right outside the ...

My eyes slowly flicker open like the light from a candle sitting in a draft. I sit up and take a big breath of air, quickly stopping when I notice ...

(This post belongs directly above posums last post the end is in posums post he posted to early) My eyes flash open due to a near by scream, the scream ...

I wake up, take my knife cross the room to Tashiki hold my knife to her throat shake her awake and say “I will miss you, my darling.” She screamed, ...

THOMAS MAVIRUM I hear my name called, and I sprint off into the forest before me. The only way I’m going to win this is if I play smart, and ...

My name is Thomas Mavirum I am 13 years old and 5’1. I have bright blue eyes and dirty blond hair. I’m not terribly skinny however, I am a little ...

My name is called, I rise, and walk out onto the island. I’m startled when something jumps out from the forest in front of me. I pick up a near ...