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Oooh, very close :P The first two might be a little off though :lol: How about: blond hair?! I think I got it!

*The monster approached the thread... and tore it to pieces! Then, as the pieces of literature fell back to the floor, he brought them all back together again!* The night ...

My question for you is: is there anything in particular you wish for me to focus on... "the story/literary aspects such as characters/plot/pacing/style" sounds about right. "more advice on dialogue" ...

American, yes :D Hmmm... light/tan skin, blue eyes, rosy pink lips, and black hair! Ha!

The hair was almost right :P Everyone else is probably much darker/shorter xD

Thanks for reviewing! Once again, I love the nitpicks. Now, up until the second "again", it's fine. You capitalised "she" correctly, because "she tried again" is a new sentence. However, ...

Wow. That was quick! Thanks for the reviews, everyone. I love the nitpicks the most :lol: The thing I see myself doing wrong with this one (I can see it ...

Banned for not laughing :lol: (Has banned too many people today. Bans self.)

Banned for having an equally short post!!! :lol:

Lets trade :P I'll review three things of your choice, and you review three things of mine, hmm? :lol: PM me if you wanna try it.

Title: Advent Children; Death of a Major Player (Part1/2) Link: (Below) Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction Points of Interest: Spelling, grammar, etc. The usual. Current Parts/Chapters: Part 1 Part 2 Tha

Series Title: Advent Children Title: Book One_ Lower Town Link: Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction (Advanced Critique) Points of Interest: My interest is spread evenly over your general opinions of the p

An excerpt of my book two, first chapter. It's titled "Death of a Major Player." Wrote it late at night, so it needs some proofing eyes! May need a wee ...

Continued from part 1... -------- And then, to their utter surprise… she did . She dropped Erasmus’s Dual Manifestation onto the ground, right on top of her shoe. The area ...

Oh wow. Um. Hmm. Someone with... orange flowing hair... who is... Irish? :D