Xivideus

Is this the beginning of a longer story? That's what it feels like. It's good, except maybe the part where Matt starts hitting Morris, that seemed kind of out of ...

:) Excellent. I think I can already see what's going to happen, not the over all story which is looking awesome, just what's going to happen with these two. I ...

I. Love. It. It's brilliantly written and I want to know what happens next! Especially more about the two characters so far mentioned! Stop reading this review and go write ...

It's a good idea but needs work. (Sorry I don't know how to quote) Some mistakes I found: "This thing didn’t come up in my mind not for once when ...

Wow. Wasn't expecting her to get angry, thought it would be one of those 'I love you and always will' type of things. It was good, I liked the surprise. ...

I don't know how to quote but "A movement besides her had her" shouldn't it be "A movement beside here had her" It's just in the second paragraph. "With Rosie ...

It's a good short story. I think it could have been better if you had added more detail, or maybe why they got hit by a bomb? Or is part ...

That was an unexpected ending! Made me smile. Could've been longer, I would have liked to hear about the BBQ scene and maybe a little more on why the doctor ...

I thought it was good but went very quickly, maybe could of used a bit more detail on some things. Like, her mind jumping around more wondering if she was ...