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i hope this makes sence I is me she is my best friend and her is my other one said other friend is my newest friend the situation is explained ...

its so short but its really good it dosnt need a whole bunch of words i think its really good keep writing :D

I love the twilight series ive read them all so far about the werewolf thing it would be nice to be warm like thats but i love vampires and pirates...ninjas ...

To me it was a little bit short i knnow you probly intended it that way but still. other than that i get what your trying to say and i ...

Im not really into the script format but easier to understand this way also to me it seemed a bit random but not really in a bad way I like ...

I have decided to put this out there this is my first story post please give me some direction here some nice advice also the little * mean footnote Footnotes ...

I really like this its an interesting take on the fairy tale its Original and different but like Evangelina said about the rhymes and the first stanza keep writing!

Rust =] seems fitting

Its a good start but also what kinda bothered me was the authors notes in the middle of the sentence that tended to confuse me more than help me maybe ...