XDarkSpiralX

Oh..ok. I'm sorry, I tried. I guess I could make her happy or bouncy or something, but then I wouldn't be able to relate to my own character, and then ...

Good lord, girl, you can write! I love this! I just read all ten chapters within an hour. Be sure to contact me when you put out the next chapter! ...

When I woke, it was to sunlight in my eyes. I blinked rapidly for a few seconds, and then looked around at the walls, in a sort of daze. My ...

Thanks Shaard, you have been a...relentless and untiring viewer of my work. You rarely have a negative comment, and are a constant encouragement. Thanks! ~ Spiral

Wow, everybody, thanks for the harsh critisism, I needed that. You gave me some good ideas, and I will try to use them all to their best potential. And ok, ...

Hey! This is Spiral. I really like it! Although I'm sure many would say it borders on cliche, I believe that so many books have been written that no book ...

Ok, thanks everyone, I'll try to apply your advice as well as I can. Also, adddictiontofiction, thanks especially for the pointer on the redundant phrasing, I didn't notice that.

Wow, thanks, Kate, I didn't notice the switch from present to past. Also, I agree, I think it would flow better. I will do that, thanks!

Ok, here it is, hope it's not as boring or an 'information dump' or maybe 'pointless'. I tried to give it purpose. ------------------------ "Stay here, with me, Jessica. Don't leave." ...

Dragonflies Of iridescent wings; Darting in the twilight- We fly together as stars sing, But as is our nature, We left each other's side; Now I yearn for you, My ...

When, where, what??? And killing yourself, isn't that a bit dramatic? :D And, also, good! You like Twilight, but I didn't know you liked it. I haven't seen where you ...

Oh, sorry! I was recreating a poetic scene, the part where Edward leaves Bella in Twilight. I know alot of people don't have very high opinions of twilight, so i ...

People, sorry that it's boring, I'll rewrite it. Wait.

Thanks for the opinion, I'll try to make it less boring. But don't worry, there is a big point found in the face from her dream.

A swift, slight touch You turn to go I reach for you To make you slow You face me again With a sad, sweet face And kiss me gently My ...