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This was good start; you have some good description and your character is quite realistic. I can't wait to see where this is going. So, here is what I am ...

You have a good start here, but I feel like in the first paragraph, you just told me all about King Thane. If your intent was as Meep suggested, to ...

Robin Hobb Indefinitely, the writer who has inspired me most. The first book of her Farseer Trilogy was the best, if you ask me, and I simply adore her writing ...

I like prologues, especially when they include symbolic language or poetry, but I really hate them when they are massive information dumps. I like them much better when they are ...

I usually use the keyboard, but if there is not keyboard near, definitely pen. I don't trust myself with pencils. I'm such a horrible perfectionist that I end up erasing ...

This was pretty good. Your description of action sequences is very crisp and good (which I admire. I am awful at writing actions sequences), and the way you set up ...

As DQ mentioned, this needs to be divided into paragraphs. I understand this is a rough draft, but it is extremely aggravating to read this piece if it is not ...

There are many different methods that work, but the one I prefer is mentioning that x amount of years have gone by within the first few paragraphs. Not necessarily first ...

This was a quite good first chapter. You introduce your primary character masterfully and give us some good glimpsese into her personality. This is well-written. The one overarching thing that ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! You have some good ideas here, so I'm going to give you a few things to work on. You're major problem here is that you have ...

As Firestarter has mentioned, I think a fresher outlook would greatly improve this poem. I noticed throughout the poem that you are very fond of similes. Now, I have nothing ...

This is the first thing I have posted in a long, long time ~ Gabrion Skies Diluted ink in the form of black rain bled across the canvas of night ...

This is pretty good. As BlackDove, said your word choice is very crisp. Your writing style is very intuitive and I am impressed by how much of the character you ...

Unlike most, I really like Dickens. :D One of the many authors that I really hate thus far is Dee Henderson, namely for her work The Protector. Her entire focus ...

Fascinating... you do a masterful job of pulling us into the character so the reader immediately gets a feel for your narrator, which is very good. I love how you ...