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Last section of chapter 1 The sky was gray that morning, a thin drizzle falling sporadically. Creiha yawned widely when the bleak light of morning shone through the trees. She ...

Well, a lot of people have already said a lot of the things I noticed, but I'll help how I can. :) Firstly, this was very good. You really have ...

Well, I'm in a fix. For my story (the duo - Flames and Tears of Lecraesa), I have written at least 30 pages of history (not within the story, of ...

I started writing Kindergarten. We had these blank booklets that my brother and I doodled on and I wrote my first story in one. It was called Snowflake and the ...

This was very interesting. Chilling, but fascinating. Good description; fast-paced during action sequences which is excellent. For the most part, good word choice. I like the way you made the ...

I get some reviews, but (though I hate to complain) I don't feel it's enough. I get even fewer in-depth critiques, but oh well. Patience is a virtue. :)

Thanks for this. I use passive voice far too much, especially the adverb thing. :wink: As Snoink and nerdpony mentioned, passive voice can be very effective if used correctly, but ...

I posted the next section of chapter 1, if anyone is interested. Thanks for the comments, everyone, and I changed most of the things you pointed out, Shadow.

I liked the concept of this and you had some very powerful language. For the most part, your rhyming flowed naturally and was not forced. I liked it. For the ...

It reminds me of a dark fantasy/mystery with a dark, mysterious hero and some kind of conspiracy behind the plot. I keep thinking of black rain. :D Guardians of the ...

Interesting. You certainly have a fascinating land and your characters seem strong so far. This could be very interesting, but there is one thing that really killed this piece for ...

Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6 Chapter 7 So, I finally decided to post the beginning of my first book on here. The chapters ...

"I beg to differ. There are times when a situation cannot be resolved by mere change." ~Strick

Sounds like a romance set in a theater; reminds me of Phantom of the Opera. Don't think I'd read it Touch the Wind

*glare* "Love them like you won't see them in the morning? Why am I putting up with this? As if I don't already have enough problems." -Strick