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Re: Suzanne's Writerly Rambles [4 March 2008]
I wish you luck! :D
Apr 9, 2007 -
Re: Flames of Lecraesa: Chapter 4 (How Far)
Creiha did not sleep; she only lay on her cot and stared at the tear-streaked window near her, the rippling moonlight casting a pallid hue over her face as the ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Sky Of Smoke (revised)
Hey Dark Magik! This is a pretty good beginning to your story. Your characters are being developed quite well and coming across clearly; your plot is intriguing. Some good things ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Syradrum 3 (Syradrum)
:) For the half-whispered, half-ordered thing? Well, I'm sure I don't hear Addo's voice the way you do, so I can't think of anything off the top of my head. ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Flames of Lecraesa: Chapter 2 (A Ruined Courtyard)
Markus's eyes are supposed to be olive-colored. :wink:
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Syradrum 3 (Syradrum)
Okay, I had way too much fun reading this. I ended up reading it aloud and it was a blast - your style flows so well. :D I ran for ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Syradrum 2 (Addo)
I liked this a lot. The entire 'navel-gazing' thing from the first part is much, much better. And I really liked Addo. :wink: The only thing that I noticed here ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: Boundries and Alleyways prologue
This was quite good. You have done a very good job of painting the setting and your first person isn't rambling - which is very good. My only major concern ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: Syradrum 1 (Falling)
Well, I think that AmeliaOliver and Sam have really hit everything I thought to say on the head. Your writing style is very good, but I had this odd feeling ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: Flames of Lecraesa: Chapter 4 (How Far)
Chapter 4 continued Captain Sophie Pierce stormed through the jail doors, her doe brown hair spilling onto her shoulders and framing her flushed face. Her two most trusted guards stumbled ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: The Trial of Aryuna - Prologue
Hallo! This was very interesting, interesting story line and I like the names. Now, because this is quite good, I am going to be extremely nitpicky. This does not mean ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: The Line: Re-appearing (chapter 2)Unedited Verion
Haha... totally didnt' see the other two sections. I'll look at those too... Rone walked slowly, turning around constantly[and] scanning the area looking for traps (this is a lot. splitting ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: The Line: Re-appearing (chapter 2)Unedited Verion
Hallo! Finally found time for your second chapter! (comments) [insert] As (I think 'when' would work better here.) Rone woke up he couldn’t remember anything except he knew he had ...
Apr 7, 2007 -
Re: The Seal of Falaurin Chapter 1
The revised version is much, much better. Your pace is more realistic and you have given us some profound insights into your characters - loads better. Just a little nitpickiness... ...
Apr 6, 2007 -
Re: Rate The Custom Title Above You
Areida.. Your avatar fits your custom title delightfully well. I love it! :) fewocious is such a cute word. Hey writer chick! :D
Apr 6, 2007