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Um... doesn't this belong in fiction?

:D Once again, I was very impressed by this. You have a marvelous style and a great grasp on the English language. Nice job here. Only a few comments: Island-Hopping ...

The Seven Deadly Sins of Island-Hopping (and no, this has nothing to do with the Pacific Theatre in WWII) For all my fellow island-hoppers What in the world is island-hopping? ...

Hee hee, co-writes can be very fun actually. I don't know where I would be without them. I think I've done three so far... none of them finished, of course. ...

This wasn't too long, so I got to it earlier than expected. :P I haven't read much of your writing, but from what I've read here, I can see that ...

Pffft, everybody knows that Fred is an alien. :P

I would like to second what was said about short, uniform sentences. They make your flow choppy and your writing less interesting. My suggestion is that you get out a ...

I would be more than happy to give you some impressions! :D One more suggestion I had after rereading this: The part where Alex talks with the Grand Bithol was ...

Um... I think you pasted my earlier comments at the end of your story. :wink:

If the characters were identifiable, I feel it is only because they have been used so many times the readers can relate them to other, well-drawn characters. While the lack ...

Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6 Chapter 7 Here goes chapter 6. This one might be slow posting because the scenes need some serious ...

Intriguing beginning, lulu. You definitely sucked me in. Your description is pretty good here and your pace seems to be going well. There are just a few things I would ...

Very powerful, Shriek. I enjoyed it and the metaphor was easy to understand yet still held onto that bit of vagueness which made it intriguing. Nicely written, as always. It ...

Do you mean who would you die to protect? "I would die to protect Lusien; she has endured too much already." ~Strick "I have never considered it. I do not ...

Wow. That was really cool. Seriously, at first, I was very surprised about Sendoma suddenly going crazy, but then the cursed spell... and that's just plain cool. It will be ...