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I second everything Imelda said. Dragging action - ah, there are many things that can lead to this. I'll give you a few things to look for and hope it ...

"My goal in life is to live - to live a good life and put what has past behind me." ~Lusien "Part of me wants to avenge my parents' murders, ...

Hello there, FUZZHEAD! So, I read it! It is a decent start. Before I tell you my concerns and impressions, I'm going to give you a friendly reminder to insert ...

Hello there, FireArris! As you have no comments as of yet, I decided to stop by and give you some tips. So, I am not going to go through this ...

On the Prologue: It was a pretty good start- you have some good description and your character is very interesting; I'm going to list off a few issues I had ...

Writing competitions? You are braver than I - good luck with them! I will take a look at your short story hopefully soon. :wink:

I was recently published in a literary magazine; however, I haven't tried to publish a book as of yet. Please reply becouse unlike some young writers here I am not ...

Unless your character is a narcissist. :lol: For the most part, I agree. If your character talks about himself/herself so much that nothing happens, there are problems; however, if the ...

Er... I don't think this belongs here. *signals for moderator* I quite like Fred, actually; he's adorable! :roll: Even though I like the name Boris more...

Hello there, Brizingr. Welcome to YWS. :D I feel that the suggestions Elein gave will help you editing the grammar and technical stuff in this, so I am just going ...

"My names means Strick." ~Strick "My name means warlike - which is quite strange, because I am not the least bit warlike." ~Markus "My name mocks me; it means light ...

Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5 Chapter 6 Chapter 7 PG for frightening images and violence Chapter 7! This one might be a bit slow posting; ...

"I would let go of the one I love; I won't let down those who depend upon me just because I love someone. That is a terrible crime." ~Creiha "I ...

A very good bit here - I enjoyed it a lot. You have a beautiful writing style with good deatil - I am very impressed. I like how you developed ...

Goodness, that was a long post, M.B. What is it missing? Substance, detail, emotion. This is a good skeleton of a story; however, I felt it was very rushed and ...