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*huggles* I love you, Cal! You have no idea how helpful those comments were. :D

Yay! I finally got around to reading this! It was very good; I am glad to see Addo and Myles working together - my two favorite characters. Just a few ...

Thanks for the suggestions, Roya. I was a bit shaky about that part with the 'tell me who your father is' too. Last scene of chapter 7 (from Markus's POV! ...

Thanks for the comments, Claudette. I haven't made any changes to this thread, but I've done a little cutting on the hard copy. Thanks for the pointing out some of ...

A cloud above my head ? Why in the world would I have a cloud over my head?" ~Strick "Sure. There are clouds in the sky every day." ~Markus "Clouds ...

Hallo! I quite enjoyed this. You have such neat names - Malfalcone, Icthus. What fun. Your style is very beautiful and is able to convey a lot with little words. ...

*spacing fixed at author's request* :D

Has anyone ever noticed that in many books whenever something important happens, it starts raining? Rain seems to be a constant for dramatic or important scenes in a story. Does ...

Like Sam said, I think that in most cases the evilness of a character stems from the lack of development of that character; however, I do believe it is possible ...

Swan Princess was actually my favorite movie when I was little. :D So yes, I remember the game - in the case of it being a game, making it a ...

This was quite good. An intriguing begining - it hooked me almost immediately and I love your style. I really don't have any qualms about this piece. Usually, in beginnings, ...

Hmmm, pretty good so far. I love fire, so I found this story very enjoyable. :P I would have expected Mary to be panicking more because of the fire. She ...

Thanks for the comment. ^_^ Now I can start posting the rest of the chapter. (Chapter 7 continued) “Strick!” Markus’s frantic voice stabbed through Strick’s dream, and Strick awoke to ...

Hello! :D As has been said above, this was quite good. Your description is absolutely gorgeous and there were next to no awkward sections that bothered me. Beautiful, in all. ...

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