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This was pretty good. It was cool how you described your emotions in so few words. Crying blood forget Painful joy Anger Bleed till desire Shadowing my face from reality ...

I say that there is no right religion. There is only truth and I believe that truth is that God created all and sent his son to die on the ...

Song of the Exile A missing place Within my heart One I cannot escape It tortures my soul I am not whole No comfort shall I take I look back ...

Thanks for the suggestions

I thought this was pretty good, but not great. Here's some crit/suggestions. The fire in his eyes and the evil in his heart was enough to shatter my soul and ...

I was fron TYWC, under the same username actually. I really like it there, though this place is more alive. I thought it was awful how those people nagged about ...

Alright, I'm not going to comment on your first part though I do agree with nickelpickle with the criticism part. On to the poem... She sits at her chair, As ...

I think that Liz and Nickelpickle gave you enough criticism which I agree with, so I will give only a few suggestions. Ok, firstly, the rhyming is really forced and ...

All right, here is the original for anyone who'd like it see it: A cold and desolate bell tower Rusted bells clanging together in bitter defeat The rolling waves lap ...

I recently discovered you can edit poems, so here it is edited with all of your suggestions...

I thought this was really nice. It was a little wordy as nietowl said, but it was good. Here's some crit The suns last rays touched the ocean, that was ...

Wow! That was really great. It really touched me and made me think. Very, very, very nice! How many petitions with underlying scars and broken hearts must you make before ...

Thank you Dreami for your ideas. Yeah, I noticed some of the rhythm when I reread it. Thanks you very much

Thanks again for the suggestions. I heavily cut it again and changed that stanza for you, niteowl

(I decided to try a new styel of poetry and see what it was like. Please tell me what you think of it) The Vow to Never Love Again A ...