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Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe because he was imaging naughty pranks involving birds poop and underwear. Joe hated pickles so ...

Hello, tinkerbell_09. It is a pleasure to meet you. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions or need your work reviewed or criticized. :D

I didn't like this Firstly, I don't like suicide poems generally, so I may be a little biased. I didn't like your short lines. They were just telling a story ...

Well, I usually like guys that do not follow me around everywhere I go and made a big deal about me; they just are there and don't put on a ...

This was good. At the very beginning, it seemed like a bunch of ramblings, but at the end you saw the point of all the words. Well done. My only ...

Thank you everyone for your suggestions. When I have more time, I'll edit it

A faded blue color like jeans you wear almost every day. :p

Yoshiarmada has a really cool username and a rocking avatar. he's also very kind and fun

Thanks everyone. I'll try to do those things

I thought this was really good. I loved your 4th stanza especially(not including the first line of the poem). My only suggestion is that you use some more linebreaks. The ...

Locked away in the towers of safety Shackled to protection’s prison As you watch your world crumble to ashes They gag you but refuse to guard your eyes You observe ...

This was good. I don't really have any suggestions. It's just... good. I wish I could give you some pointers to work on, but can't think of any

This is nice and a good start. I have but one suggestion: In the beginning, you say 'It all started that fateful day' What all started that fateful day? I ...

That was cool. I think it could use some better description. Perhaps you could describe the layout of the cottage and the kind of feeling that circulated throughout the area. ...

Hm.... this is interseting and I liked your color stanzas and the contrast made between them. Your last two lines were pretty good even though this was quite confusing. This ...