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^ Has a unique username... :wink:

I really liked your description of the cold winds and how the ice turns to stone. I really enjoyed this poem. The only thing that bothered me was the 2nd ...

This was interesting; kind of hard to understand, but interesting nevertheless A cat and mouse set sail, getting drenched in the rain. The cat had inflicted the mouse so much ...

I really liked this poem; it revealed its message very well and I liked your rhyming over all. But shouldn't distracter be distractor? I'm not sure, but I think you ...

Yeah, it just didn't catch you. It seemed to just be a story; it needs more emotion. Instead of telling the story, try including more of the girl's emotions and ...

^ is stuck in a medieval portrait... sounds intriguing... :wink:

As Triona said, it lacked the emotion to grip me. You have some good ideas here You can’t tell, but I love you more then you know I might be ...

Wow, that was really well done. Your language was beautiful and I loved your 'flowe crushed under the weight of life' part... that was beautiful. I especially loved your last ...

^ her avatar is half-sick of shadows....interesting

^ Has a pretty new avatar :wink:

Yeah, Jack and Sureal are right... no apostrophe on 'its' Anyways, on to the poem... Firstly, I agree with Jack that this isn't exactly original. It needs more imagery and ...

I really liked the message here... it's so true. Here's a well-earned critique for ya. In the moment of grief I was numb to the pain Running deep to the ...

^ avatar has a cute puppy on it... :D

Em, it's pretty good; I like the image, but I do have a few critiques Stars in the sky (an okay start, but if you described the sky and stars, ...

^ has an EXTREMELY long word in her siggy... :shock: I wouldn't want to have to write that in an in-class essay