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Re: Black Market
So I've thought of this great underground market as a setting. But the question is, what the heck is supposed to go in it? It's not really you're traditional "Black ...
Apr 7, 2011 -
Re: Worship
My hand smoothed over my lover's back. Muscles twitched and relaxed under my touch and a soft sigh escaped to one next to me. My lips followed the path of ...
Oct 29, 2010 -
Re: Across The Pond
I liked this piece a lot! I only found a couple quick errors. "none the less the country" I think 'never mind the country' would sound better here. None the ...
Mar 20, 2010 -
Re: Makng it (For Love and Music #1)
So, usually I do a lot of nit-picking, but I think most of the stuff I was going to say was already pointed out. I'm just going to reiderate the ...
Jan 24, 2010 -
Re: Runaways Chap. 2
This is definitely an interesting idea. I'm just curious about the title. You call them runaways, but are they really runaways or possible orphans? Be careful of mixed tenses. You ...
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Couples' Weekend (Chapter Two)
I haven't read the first part of this but I definitely want to! It seems very fun. Your characters are totally relatable and I love that. There are only a ...
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Admins delete
Sorry if this seems a little brutal, but I'm just trying to help. First of all, I agree with pinkangel that you should probably brush up on some of your ...
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Partners
Thanks for all the corrections! I can't believe I made so many! I must not have looked it over again in my processor after I took a break. Thanks for ...
Jun 2, 2009 -
Re: Partners
This is the Prologue and first chapter of something I thought up. Any kind of feedback, including ideas, is helpful. Thanks! Prologue We might have become a known race, but ...
Jun 1, 2009 -
Re: Stormy Reviews~
hi, I'm looking for a pretty brutal review for this piece cuz I like it alot Unsolved Mystery fantasy
May 24, 2009 -
Re: The Last Wolf
Hi, ovbiously I'm WritersBlock and I'm here to pick at your piece, but luckily I didn't find much to possibly change :) so let's get started! The animal moved silently, ...
May 24, 2009 -
Re: Deleted
This is really fantastic and I hope you keep writing, but I do have a few things to pick at. There was a sweet aroma, full of spices and honey ...
May 24, 2009 -
Re: Unsolved Mystery
Arms wound around my stomach, caging me against a much larger body. Hot breath puffed against the back of my ear, tickling. A low growl shivered over my senses; making ...
May 24, 2009 -
Re: A Dark Elf's Tale
Your grammar and spelling are very good and the story is interesting. I'm just going to pick at a couple of things: "long a go" this is one word " ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: Magic and Mischief (Prologue)
Although it will be redundant and hypocritical(since I'm a description maniac), I will once again point out the amount of description. It's not all bad, but there might be a ...
May 23, 2009
