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Your characters intrigue me. I want to know more about this girl and supposed bad guy. I have a sense that not everything is as it seems, and that mystery ...

Back again for round two. Now, this one is going to be a shorter one, because most of the comments I made on your prologue can be applied to this ...

The chemistry between your characters is refreshing, and their dialogue and interactions were nice. However, the lack of information on the setting and this story just being too perfect, gift ...

We have two hundred trick-or-treaters come to my parent's house every year. We dress up our toy poodle (she as bubble bee this year) and play creepy music in the ...

It seems like you have a good idea for a novel here, however, you do not need this prologue. It is my personal opinion that prologues should be used sparingly ...

While I commend you for taking on Camelot and knights and kings, this story was just really bland. You have written a story that is at least in part related ...

A very quick and short review for you. You really need to post more of this, that is, if you want to get thoughtful reviews from people. This snippet is ...

Your writing flows nicely, and the story is sweet. Your MC has some personality in her narration style which is nice. The biggest issue with this piece is that it ...

You may have the beginnings of myth here, and rather interesting one at that, but ultimately this piece was so wrought with errors and inconsistencies that the story was lost. ...

I really liked this. It seems you have quite a knack for writing. Your poetic language, particularly in the beginning, is lovely. Mood is one of those things that you ...

This piece is decent for a first edit. However, I think it could benefit from a through read through to reduce the wordiness. As well as injection of emotion, as ...

The rather glib narration style you have for this piece works. The contrast of the jolly, witty, Englishmen and the hired killer is a nice touch. However, I think you ...