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8.5/10 Lol, that's funny! :D

10/10 Lol :lol:

I promise an in-depth critique as soon as I get back from Piano lessons! Promise!

I promise you I'll give this an in-depth critique as soon as I can, but I have to get off now. :( Reviewing your work is always so fun! :wink:

Ok, the edit is up. :P I don't know how much better it is, but...yeah.

Well, I agree with kitty15 on the punctuation and the imagery. It's a very overdone/cliched theme, but that doesn't bother me. This poem tells the truth and yes, it's simple, ...

Hi Neena! Welcome to YWS! :D Anyways, my real name's Camille but you can call me Ayra :P What kind of writing do you do? I write mostly fantasy, but ...

-No guns! Also, did you just leave everyone else? Like walk away?_ :?

Aw, that was cute! :) I must agree about the first sentence though--it kind of runs on for a while. A little girl in a blue dress the deep color ...

Wow, thanks so much! :D That's a good idea; I'll add more about what's actually going on in the story. :P No, this is definitely not the first Chapter. I ...

-Just so you know, confusion magic doesn't work on everyone. Some may learn to block it out.- "I am Ayra...that is all you need to know." she said slowly. Her ...

It was early morning when Ruki woke up. The sun had just risen up into the sky. There's nothing specifically wrong with these sentences, but I think you could definitely ...

Well, that was...interesting...! It's a little short, so I can't give you an in-depth review. :( However, the rhyming near the end sounds quite bizarre... Well, Cheers to random poem ...

Banned for having an even more weird smilie in their post! (it's...robotic!) :smt117

Wow, you're a good photographer! I agree with everyone else--the goldfish one is better. The flower one is still good, but it looks a little fuzzy.