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I don't know... On the weekends, I do like, 10 critiques a day. :P But on school days I only get about 3-5 done. I usually go to the 'View ...

8/10 Neeheer, I like the dancing doll thing. :P

Thanks everyone! I'm going to tone down the purpleness a bit...and by the way, Maude is my dog. :D

Had I retained my defining features? 'Retained'...I dunno, it sounds weird in contrast to the vocabulary that Coden usually chooses. I shook my head and tried not to dwell on ...

Hey Falcon! (It's easier than saying _Falcon_Ablaze, even though that is an awesome screen name.) Welcome to YWS! So yeah, 'names Camille, I love to write Fantasy Fiction, blah blah ...

I agree with xyberangel on how you could add more imagery to suggest that your pain was physical and the other person's was emotional. But Snoink already pointed out what ...

Thanks Heather! You're right about the frostbite--it did happen to me though--because it's kind of just...a random statement. :P I'll change the sentences to 'struggle' and the tortoiseshell. Except,

First of all, 'Amoung' is supposed to be 'Among'. :wink: Well, this is the skeleton of a poem. You have a concept and an Idea, but you need imagery, more ...

:D Thanks everyone! I'm currently editing in on a separate document and hopefully I'll be finished soon...it's hard for me to get rid of some of the detail. I just ...

:smt017 That is strange... But HILARIOUS! :smt037 Like, Omigod you guuuuys, that's gotta be the coolest song ever! Besides O Fortuna. Suzanne introduced me to that song. :)

Hhmm...I did think about it. It's really short, and well, yeah. Short. No one stays in love by chance, but by work? Not true. I wish I could stop liking ...

I promise you that I'll critique this tomorrow, but for now, you should fix the title. It should be: Sacuna's gift: Prologue.

I think you should capitalize your I's, so that it looks like this: You remain silent and unseen. Nameless to my lips but I cannot hide the scars you left. ...

Haha! :) That was hilarious! I love it! It completely fits into the tune of Jingle Bells! xD :lol: Oh Jingle bells, Ringing cells, Pink designer shoes, Oh what fun ...

Indeed it is. I don't know how I would get by without chocolate. ^^ Who is to say? Not me. I say lots of things, but many of them are ...