Wolf

7/10 Bleeeeek

Banned for liking the Twilight Books. *barfs*

Thanks a million Ning! I love the 'naked eye', so I'll definitely change that. :) And sure, I'll PM you. Heh. I have a feeling that I'm about to be ...

I haven't read the previous four chapters [yet], so this critique will be mainly for grammar. Just as Alita thoughts she was alone (except for the playful squirrels above); she ...

I agree that there are too many questions in this, but I don't think you should get rid of them. :) I think you should elaborate on your questions. Now ...

I don't like the line breaks in this, primarily because it doesn't fit with the theme. I always think of fire as flowing and hungry, but your poem seems kind ...

This looks awesome! :D I am: Whoever I want to be I wonder: About rain and fire I hear: The sound of a thousand sufferings I see: The trees outside ...

Wow... The imagery and the flow in this is excellent. You really caught my attention and held it until the end. And even after the end, I was thinking about ...

Well, they do die. Quite often. :P And aren't the people in your book un-aging too? Well, now that I've defended myself; thanks! :)

Thanks for the review! :} An A student? I wish...well, A's in Language, but I failed Math. >.< Heh.

Thanks Suzanne! You're right - I did write this more for myself than the reader. And lol, I also like the last bit. Heehee. I will probably switch perspectives around ...

(I don't know what kind of poem this is, so if it's in the wrong category, sorry.) In case anyone's interested, I wrote this for a girl that I met ...

Wow, that was awesome! I don't think you should change anything. This was short, but to the point and extremely well-written. Really, this was amazing. I really liked the part ...

I didn't really understand this - but I'm young[er] and poetry is often hard for me to understand. I love this line: I set my gaze the way I used ...

Yeah... This is the usual angsty dog poo that is posted daily on forums everywhere. I hope you're not writing this about yourself - no one shoudl EVER by guilty ...