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I have a similar problem, Fan. And you're right - it's very annoying to sort it out. So they have to have the organs, eh? Well... To avoid pawnage by ...

Hmmm... I agree with Snoink - just write whatever you want, and then go back and work on it. I think that eventually everything will be cliched, because people will ...

Suzanne, you look so mature and prettiful! And coolio shirt.*steals the shirt* Ew, that sounded very gross. *gives it back* And - harumph! Maude is being ignored!

Wow, that's cool. I should join a group! :D

*shaming the name of SPEW, sorry * SPEW? What's that? Any ways. This is really short - nothing to critique - but it does seem interesting. You should definitely continue ...

It's accepted now days, as long as you don't over do it. It can really help the flow of prose if used well. Ditto. I use it sometimes, but mostly ...

Let us all dance to honour the pretty people! *starts chanting and doing a tribal-ish dance around the fire*

Hhmm....I think, yes. Suzanne and... and.... and... and... *crickets* Suzanne and scotty.knows! Hahahaha! (Just kidding - I have no idea who Suzanne would go with)

Thanks, both of you. :) R.J. Hoffman: Thanks for the tip, I'll break it up a little. And yes, I love the ocean. ^_^ Derek_Fantasy: Thank-you! :} But being a ...

Thanks for the review! =) Its supposed to be vague, though. But I might explain a tiny bit....

Yeah, ditto. The first two lines are really cliched, but the rhyming is very good. The only thing that bothered me was that you seem to have written this poem ...

arch angel -- This is your, what, fourth submission today? Please, no more than one per day or else you shall suffer the wrath of the mods. Heck, I shouldn't ...

Emily -- Meeeeeeow! Writing about unrequited love already, are we? Perhaps a hint on what guy in our HR class you like? Huh? Huh? Any ways. Onto the critique! As ...

arch angel --- Please don't submit more than one story per day, okay? People get annoyed when the forums are all clogged with your work. Although I am quite envious ...

That's a good rule, Nate! :) I don't use the Chat often, but I don't think I have anything to worry about. *is smug* xD