Wolf

8/10 It's interesting...

9/10 Cool! Her hair pwns.

8/10 It looks cool but I can't really see the details...

0/10 Ewww! Gwen, what were you thinking?! *blinded by the grossness*

Scared. That was what she felt. Ugh. As soon as I read this, I didn't want to read anymore. In any event, you've mixed up your tenses. I should be ...

7/10 Your old one was better...the girl looks, like, anorexic or something. ^_~

Back to review the edit - and now that I'm more competent in the subtle art of criting, hopefully it'll be a better review. :wink: Shaking her head, she tacitly ...

I would totally read it! I like the idea of screaming on the brink of a cliff especially. It seems like the kind of thing I'd do...:P So anyways. I ...

Thank-you! I have actually decided to start my novel differently; but all these critiques shall not be wasted. I might stick with this idea...and if I don't, I'll use it ...

Hey Andy! Man, I should have reviewed this long ago. I've been meaning to critique something of yours for ages, but everything in your portfolio already had, like, a gazillion ...

Only six more years! :P That sounds like an awesome idea - I'd love to meet the YWSers. But my parents would NEVER let me do that...:/ Anyways, I live ...

Thanks you guys! :D I followed all of your suggestions, and I came up with 'Elkari'. Sounds a little like 'elk', but they are into nature, right? :wink:

Hi there, OverEasy. :) The first thing I noticed was that this chapter is very short. Dangerously short. I know that some novels (in you are indeed hoping to publish ...

Oh, phooey. Everyone's already reviewed...:/ Still - even though all the mistakes have been pointed out, why don't I say what I liked and why? It probably won't be very ...

10/10 Lol - I think I know!