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Echo to Colleen up there. ^_~ Seriously, listen to her. She knows what she's talking about - and I agree with absolutely everything that she said. However, this isn't all ...

Thanks chocoholic! I love YWS - two crits already and this has been up for what, half an hour? :D

Thank-you! I'll fix that right away! :)

Anyway, I'm one of those people who lie down to go to sleep and frequently has turn the light back on and write something. One of those people who has ...

>>> Review one of five >>> Very nice, canis! I'm a sucker for animal/native spirituality stories in general, but I especially like your 'Totems'. They just leave me with a ...

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I've sent in my piece 'City of Ashes' to a children's literature magazine called 'Stone Soup', but soon I'll be too old to submit and I need something...new. So! Does ...

The sun had finally set, dipping below the horizon like a spoonful of lava. 'had' should be has, because the rest of the piece is written in the present tense. ...

Lol, every time I get grounded (I think I've been grounded about five times since christmas xD) I just find other ways to use the computer. For example, going online ...

It looks like grammar has already been addressed, but I have some of my own comments... This does sound a lot like Twilight. The whole thing with Taylor - I ...

Thanks Vivi! I'll work on that! :P

Thank-you Ning! I'll definitely take into consideration what you have said - except for the school thing. She's not at school...what made you think that?! :lol: And I'll work on ...

(I've already read the first chapter) Instead of correcting all your grammar mistakes, I'll show you a few examples and hopefully you can fix them all. :wink: Mounds of snow ...

Oh! Terribly sorry about that. Now, how about I try to give you a better critique? This is excellent as it is, but I noticed that the whole thing is ...

I've no criticism whatsoever. I've no long an inspired ramblings about grammar or tense or syntax. I've nothing to do but be absolutely useless and inform you that this was ...