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No prob! :D I noticed another thing though: I lifted my head from my shoulders and breathed in, slowly opening my oak brown eyes. I thought her eyes were ice ...

Hey ning! :) The title struck me as kind of emo, and that's probably not a good thing. But onto the critique! The circular silver moon drifted across the dawning ...

I'm here to [s]tear up[/s] critique chapter four! :D He is much like the other three, but much different as well. He is a bit shorter, and a hell of ...

Hey enjeru! I'm here for chapter three. :) “No, I can smell it on you.” He replies. Instead of the period after 'you', put a comma. James looks somewhat distracted, ...

Sorry it's taken me so long to critique - I walk away form the school as if I had a purpose. 'form' should be 'from'. :wink: When I'm sure no ...

This might just be the school computers, but: I was online at school this morning at 8:25-8:40. The browser I was using was Internet Explorer, and I logged out of ...

I'm sorry, but I'm not even going to bother with an in-depth critique for this. There are so many typos in just four short paragraphs - it gives me the ...

6/10 It's kind of hard to see what it is...

Zomg, I just realized that there's a prologue to this! *hyperventilates* I know I should be reviewing the first chapter, but it wouldn't seem right if I overlooked this bit, ...

Thanks you guys! =) Wow, I'd kind of forgotten about this piece. But now that you have brought it back to my attention, it shall be worked on! canis >> ...

Hehe, thanks! =] .:UPDATE:. I've been kind of busy, so I haven't gotten more than a few paragraphs down for Sleeping Valor's idea. I'm thinking that her transformation (or whatever ...

Whoa, I'm way overdue in critting this! :oops: I had left the barren valley behind and was now wading through waist-deep grass under a sparkling sun. There was a glistening ...

:D Critique Four of Five :D Meh. Azila has been here before me, so there might not be much to point out. :P But I shall comment anyways. My pony-tail ...

Known for liking cats. ^.^

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