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Banned for confusing leopards and ocelots. :wink:

Thanks Gryph! I'm glad that the second person works. :) - Camille

Aw! These pets are so CUTE! Here's my dog, Maude! The picture was taken a couple months ago, but she stills looks 98% the same. :D

I stole it from someone? Umm... no, I don't think I did. I didn't take this idea, characters, plot, setting etc from anyone else. What do you mean?

I'm going to have to agree with Azila about your characters. Nobody is actually like that - we can discuss it in greater detail tomorrow, when you come over. I ...

7/10 Kind of whimsical, but it's kind of indistinct, too.

Hey Fangala! :oops: Sorry it's taken me so long to crit this... I had left the barren valley behind and was now wading through waist-deep grass under a sparkling sun. ...

Thanks you guys! Kyte >> Yes, it was intentional. =) shanan >> Haha, thank-you. I did it... erm, during math class. XD - Camille

Hey enjeru! :D This is a really short chapter, but I'll do an in-depth crit anyways. “Gah!” I jump up. “Don’t sneak up on me like that, Bryson!” He grins ...

GG >> Thanks! Clichés are very annoying. :wink: Fairy >> :D I'll fix those things right away! I really appreciate your review. Yay! I love YWS - two reviews already! ...

Known for being the spiff-tastic author of DoaV! =)

When reviewing, please keep in mind that this is only an excerpt. Some things may seem unclear, but that is [mostly] because this is from the middle of the story. ...

Known for ... liking fairies? XD

Extraterrestial -- Do you even read the critiques that people write for you? Or do you ignore them, and only come on YWS to post your stories? I'm not trying ...

Whoa! Before you post things on YWS, please break it up into paragraphs. It makes it look less like a menacing wall of text and more like... a story. PM ...