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Hehe, I was wondering why you looked so much older than 13! Your cousin's pretty, but I had a feeling it wasn't you. :wink: As for the actual photos... The ...

:oops: I'm so sorry that it's taken me so long to critique this! ... and you seem to have received some excellent crits already. >.< So there's no nit-picks, just ...

I'm going to have to agree with whoever said they'd like to say they enjoyed it but didn't, unfortunately. The first problem, I think, is that it's kind of cliche. ...

Hehe, these are cool, Saint! His expression in the third vignette ROCKS my SOCKS! Seriously. I agree with Via that you should express the 'cheap, sleazy' aspect in the actual ...

Thanks so much, Prokar! That did help, more than a bit -- a lot! :D And yeah, you can still call me Ayra. ;p I'll be fixing those things right ...

Back again. :) "What do you want henchman?" The tallest snapped, crinkling his nose up in disgust. "The girl, what do you wish me to do with her?" The bulky ...

Wow, thank you for the awesome critiques! =) They really helped. Ill work on nit-picks now, and today, I'll try to make the characters more... characterized, lol. And I think ...

I'll make it Lyla. :D That's a good idea about having her struggle through the day. I'll write something tonight and post it tomorrow! I know, me two, but we ...

Sure! :D I come forwards to investigate only to be pushed to the floor and beaten. 'pushed' should be 'pushes'. I forgot that last time. ;p The girl dodged between ...

Thanks so much, ning! =) Hehe, Lila is pronounced LIE-LA. But I can still change it if you want. XD You tend to use '--' a lot, would you mind ...

Thanks Keek! ^.^

Hey! :D I did promise to review this, so I will. I'll do it paragraph-by-paragraph. PARAGRAPH #1: The sun dropped down, and the world was plunged in darkness. The New ...

Thanks, lupis! :D Actually, I do have more posted. It's the 'NN -- Prologue' in my portfolio. XD It's the complete prologue, this and another longer bit. - Camille xx

The complete prologue is up! Just in case you guys are interested. (Hint, hint!) (Have you ever read Tithe by Holly Black? =P Your story reminds me of it a ...

The prologue is finally up! w00t! As you might know, I struggle with characterization, so any tips on how to improve on that would be much appreciated! Curdled moonlight writhed ...