Willow

I cringe. So much. I wrote this when I was 12 and posted it when I was 14. It was the first piece of writing I ever attempted (they weren't ...

Thanks for the crit Sam :) (especially the scull thing, I guess that's were my not being English comes through :oops: ) The part about her uncle trying to bite ...

Thanks again for all the crit :) This is the last piece so I hope you've enjoyed the story and if you have any suggestions or comments feel free to ...

I noticed some of the changes you made and they are better, but I still feel that you can add a lot more detail and description, especially where the characters ...

Thanks again for the crit :) I've started editing the other two pieces but I haven't posted them yet. For now I hope you enjoy this :arrow: A smile formed ...

I agree with dianis, you have a good hook and you keep the reader wondering, but maybe a little too much. Add some more description and focus on detail. Try ...

First of all, the ghastly stuff is cool and necessary if you're writing crime fiction, so don't worry about it This stoy is well writeen and you create a good ...

Thanks for the previous crit guys :) This part won't make much sense if you didn't read the first part, but I hope this gives the story a bit more ...

Hey guys Just wanted to say I'm back. Don't know how I went a year without YWS. I think I suffered from temporary insanity. Anyway hey to everyone :)

The month of August 1943 was one Alyssa would never forget. The air was full of the hazy smell of summer: sweet, cloying, like every flower was fighting for their ...

Thanks for the crit guys. *waves back at Sam* The guy was based on someone I had seen that day. I didn't get close enough to see if he had ...

He removed his cap slowly and let the slightly yellowish hair fall over his eyes. I half smiled, half-grimaced. A thin trickle of blood had snaked its way down the ...

This is only the beginning of a story: I stepped into the dingy little bar, looking around. Dirty sunlight filtered in through the half open door I’d just come through, ...

Thanks for replying Jiggy This is kinda the way I write. I write whatever I feel like at the moment, just to write. This was one of those pieces. I ...

This is just a little piece I wrote when I was bored. It's not the beginning or the end of anything. I haven't posted in a while and I just ...