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Re: Chapter 1 of Untitled Scifi/Dystopian
Thank you. You gave me an excellent review, it's helped a lot :)
Apr 9, 2012 -
Re: Parallel Realm : The Conjurer Wars - 1
In the second paragraph, you accidentally used a / instead of a . once; also, you might want to break it up a little. Always start a new line for ...
Apr 8, 2012 -
Re: Chapped and Peeling
All right. I've been hesitating on this a while now. I kept trying to find grammar issues, other than fragments (which are obviously stylistic), but I actually couldn't find very ...
Apr 8, 2012 -
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Protip: Never, ever start off with "My name is" and then describe in excruciating detail just how "beautiful omglol" the low-IQ character is ._.
Apr 1, 2012 -
Re: We Are the Ninety-Nines (Working Title) - Chapter 1
This is great! :D Your style is casual in the right way, and the character has a good voice. To be an absolute nitpicker, perhaps you could capitalize PopTarts, and ...
Apr 1, 2012 -
Re: Chapter 1 of Untitled Scifi/Dystopian
Thank you :D I've been working on chapter two
Apr 1, 2012