Whitewings

OI! you're harsh on me cuz you care! 1.Starting with the first and second line, " f ear" and the " f eel" make the reading a bit awkward. It ...

It's really got a good pace and the plot is getting interesting. I don't do exact quotes for nitpicky stuff, but I do have just two things: 1. When the ...

mouse

tight

Depends on what kind of penguin Have you shot a penguin?

Love Letter- BOA

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

I always thought chicken was what every meat was supposed to taste like.

Granted, but then you find a hungry human eating lion instead. I wish my wish could not be corrupted.

jingle bells

Night Wrap me up in darkness A black blanket overhead Keep me safe and hide my face Protect the thoughts within Betray no emotion upon an unseen body Cover up ...

This is a simple prologue that's not made to reveal too much in the story, if someone were to choose not to read it, it's designed not to affect the ...

This is a really good piece of writing :D There's just a couple of things that I picked out: 1. Some of the senteces are missing punctuations, it might seem ...

I liked this poem alot because it was easy to follow, and the descriptions were very vivid. There's just two parts that seems a bit out: 1. "brain pumped with ...

9/10 makes you think....