WhiteWolf

I think it's an awesome poem, and should be in the poem section too. Anyway keep writing and have fun!

I thought that was awesome! It has a great attention grabber, and was interesting the whole way through. Though in one part "It looked like they was goin' for a ...

Thanks for the tips, and i did forget a word I'll make sure to look for that more, along with grammar and spelling next time.

I thought it was a pretty good story, it was definitely interesting, and it was a lot different from what I usually read, and that made me love it all ...

Thanks, and whoops I didn't even notice, and thanks for being the first to comment!

Ok i know there is no romance part in the beginning I just started it if people think it's good i will continue writing it. If not let me know ...

I thought it was a bit different than things i normally read, but it could still use some work. Is that voice the narrator or is it the characters deep ...