Whales_Rock

Okay, nice! Like your idea, but, to me it needs more structure. Use a thesauraus and replace some word to make them better! You should make it more intense! "It’s ...

You've got a swell idea, you just need to develop it more. Yes, you need to add much more description and make it longer. It just tells, there is no ...

Well, to start it was kind of confusing for me. This part here: Why hello there "I'm death, nice to meet you Oh your colourful hair I like colours Colourful ...

Wow, I really liked it! It was real nice from start to finish ( And I agree with genuine-writer, I liked how it was like a story. And about the ...